<p>我的名字是Leandro, 我已經学了三年的汉语 (I've studied Chinese for 3 years)。 这是我第一次用汉语書寫 (This is my first time writing using Chinese)，寫的不是很好 (it isn't very good/readable)。 我必需學会说汉语是因为我的工作是在中国 (The reason I must learn to speak Chinese is that my job is in China).</p>
<p>In the last sentence, you may attach any reason that is corresponding to the reasoning - 我必需學会说汉语是因为...</p>
<ul>
<li><p>我希望留在中國工作. (I wish to stay and work in China)</p>
</li>
<li><p>工作需要. (required by work)</p>
</li>
</ul>

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r13
<blockquote>
<p>我的名字是Leandro,</p>
</blockquote>
<p>no problem</p>
<blockquote>
<p>我在学习汉语三年。</p>
</blockquote>
<p>我（已经）学习了三年汉语。 I've been studying Chinese for 3 years.</p>
<p>“了” Used after a verb or adjective to indicate completion</p>
<blockquote>
<p>这是一号的文本，这是不好。</p>
</blockquote>
<p>这是我第一次写作，写得不好。
一号的文本 means “Text No. 1”，“First time writing” is “第一次写作”</p>
<p>“得” Used after a verb or adjective to connect a complement that expresses degree or result.</p>
<blockquote>
<p>我要会说汉语因为我要走工作自中国.</p>
</blockquote>
<p>我想（学习）说汉语以便在中国工作。</p>
<p>. ×  。 √</p>
<p>“want to” is 想 or 想要，not 要</p>
<p>“so” = “以便” or “为了” Expressing purpose, not cause and effect</p>

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Deltaplus
<blockquote>
<p><em>My name is Leandro, - 我的名字是Leandro</em></p>
</blockquote>
<p>Looks good</p>
<blockquote>
<p><em>I've been studying Chinese for 3 years - 我在学习汉语三年</em></p>
</blockquote>
<p><strong>我己学习了汉语三年</strong></p>
<ul>
<li>I've been = 我己經 (not '我在学' - 'I am learning')</li>
</ul>
<blockquote>
<p><em>This is my first (Chinese) writing, - 这是一号的文本</em></p>
</blockquote>
<p><strong>这是我的第一次中文写作</strong></p>
<ul>
<li><p>my = 我的</p>
</li>
<li><p>text = writing = 写作</p>
</li>
</ul>
<blockquote>
<p><em>it isn't good. - 这是不好。</em></p>
</blockquote>
<p><strong>不是很流利</strong></p>
<ul>
<li><p>subject 'it' can be omitted</p>
</li>
<li><p>流利 = fluent (&quot;not good&quot; is too general)</p>
</li>
</ul>
<blockquote>
<p><em>I want to (learn) to speak Chinese so I can work in China. - 我要会说汉语，因为我要走工作自中国</em></p>
</blockquote>
<p><strong>我想学说汉语，这样我就能在中国工了</strong></p>
<ul>
<li><p>want to = 想 (not 要)</p>
</li>
<li><p>so = 这样 (not 因为)</p>
</li>
<li><p>自 is a typo of 在</p>
</li>
<li><p>走 is a typo of 就</p>
</li>
<li><p>In Chinese grammar, it is 就能在中国工作, not 就能工作在中国</p>
</li>
</ul>

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Tang Ho
<p>我的名字是Leandro, 我在学习汉语三年。这是一号的文本，这是不好。 我要会说汉语因为我要走工作自中国.</p>
<p>What i tried to write:</p>
<p>My name is Leandro, I've been studying Chinese for 3 years. This is my first text, it isn't good. I want to speak Chinese so I can work in China.</p>
<p>Thanks in advance!</p>

<writing-critique>
Is my mini text correct? How can I write it better?
# Is my mini text correct? How can I write it better?

(Asked by: username_0 on 2022-02-11)

我的名字是Leandro, 我在学习汉语三年。这是一号的文本，这是不好。 我要会说汉语因为我要走工作自中国.

What i tried to write:

My name is Leandro, I've been studying Chinese for 3 years. This is my first text, it isn't good. I want to speak Chinese so I can work in China.

Thanks in advance!

**Tags:** writing-critique


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## 3 answers

### Answer by username_3 on 2022-02-11. Score: 3 | Accepted answer

> *My name is Leandro, - 我的名字是Leandro*

Looks good

> *I've been studying Chinese for 3 years - 我在学习汉语三年*

**我己学习了汉语三年**

* I've been = 我己經 (not '我在学' - 'I am learning')

> *This is my first (Chinese) writing, - 这是一号的文本*

**这是我的第一次中文写作**

* my = 我的
* text = writing = 写作

> *it isn't good. - 这是不好。*

**不是很流利**

* subject 'it' can be omitted
* 流利 = fluent ("not good" is too general)

> *I want to (learn) to speak Chinese so I can work in China. - 我要会说汉语，因为我要走工作自中国*

**我想学说汉语，这样我就能在中国工了**

* want to = 想 (not 要)
* so = 这样 (not 因为)
* 自 is a typo of 在
* 走 is a typo of 就
* In Chinese grammar, it is 就能在中国工作, not 就能工作在中国


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### Answer by username_1 on 2022-02-11. Score: 3

我的名字是Leandro, 我已經学了三年的汉语 (I've studied Chinese for 3 years)。 这是我第一次用汉语書寫 (This is my first time writing using Chinese)，寫的不是很好 (it isn't very good/readable)。 我必需學会说汉语是因为我的工作是在中国 (The reason I must learn to speak Chinese is that my job is in China).

In the last sentence, you may attach any reason that is corresponding to the reasoning - 我必需學会说汉语是因为...

* 我希望留在中國工作. (I wish to stay and work in China)
* 工作需要. (required by work)


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### Answer by username_2 on 2022-02-12. Score: 1

> 我的名字是Leandro,

no problem

> 我在学习汉语三年。

我（已经）学习了三年汉语。 I've been studying Chinese for 3 years.

“了” Used after a verb or adjective to indicate completion

> 这是一号的文本，这是不好。

这是我第一次写作，写得不好。
一号的文本 means “Text No. 1”，“First time writing” is “第一次写作”

“得” Used after a verb or adjective to connect a complement that expresses degree or result.

> 我要会说汉语因为我要走工作自中国.

我想（学习）说汉语以便在中国工作。

. × 。 √

“want to” is 想 or 想要，not 要

“so” = “以便” or “为了” Expressing purpose, not cause and effect


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