<blockquote>
  <p>酒吧漆黑的墙面稀疏地装饰着粉红樱花图案。</p>
</blockquote>

<p>--> 酒吧漆黑的墙面[上]，稀疏地[點綴]着粉红[色的]樱花图案。 --> <strong>粉红色的樱花图案，稀疏地點綴着酒吧漆黑的墙面。</strong></p>

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2020-02-16T04:28:00.760Z
2020-02-16T04:28:00.760Z
Tang Ho
<p>Your suggestion is already pretty good now!</p>

<p>There are other possible ways to express the same thing:</p>

<p>装饰在酒吧漆黑墙面上的，是稀疏的粉红樱花图案。</p>

<p>粉红的樱花图案，稀疏地装饰在酒吧漆黑的墙面上。</p>

CC BY-SA 4.0
2020-02-16T10:15:41.017Z
2020-02-16T10:15:41.017Z
Toosky Hierot
<p>酒吧漆黑的墙面上稀稀拉拉地贴着几片粉色樱花图案。</p>

<p>(Don't go to the bar, you might get the 病毒！）</p>

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2020-02-16T06:34:40.247Z
2020-02-16T06:34:40.247Z
Pedroski
<p>I'm trying to describe the walls in a bar (in my story), and this is what I've come up with:</p>

<blockquote>
  <p>酒吧漆黑的墙面稀疏地装饰着粉红樱花图案。</p>
</blockquote>

<p>Essentially, there's a bar and it's walls are painted black, except for a pink cherry-blossom motif which occurs infrequently.</p>

<p>Describing things in detail seems to be a major obstacle for me at the moment.  I'd prefer to keep <a href="http://youdao.com/w/%E6%BC%86%E9%BB%91" rel="nofollow noreferrer">漆黑</a> and <a href="http://youdao.com/w/%E8%A3%85%E9%A5%B0" rel="nofollow noreferrer">装饰</a> in the sentence which are words I should learn, the others are not so important.</p>

<p><strong>Question</strong>: How can I improve this sentence?</p>

<p>I'm particularly uncomfortable with 装饰着 as it sounds "active".</p>

<hr>

<p>In case it's of any help:</p>

<blockquote>
  <p>The bar's painted-black walls are sparsely decorated with a pink cherry-blossom motif.<br>
  酒吧的粉刷成黑色的墙壁稀疏地装饰着粉红色的樱桃花图案。<br>
  <sub><a href="https://translate.google.cn/#view=home&amp;op=translate&amp;sl=en&amp;tl=zh-CN&amp;text=The%20bar&#39;s%20painted-black%20walls%20are%20sparsely%20decorated%20with%20a%20pink%20cherry-blossom%20motif." rel="nofollow noreferrer">Google Translate</a></sub></p>
</blockquote>

<translation><writing-critique>
How can I improve 酒吧漆黑的墙面稀疏地装饰着粉红樱花图案 to describe a floral pattern on the black walls of a bar?
# How can I improve 酒吧漆黑的墙面稀疏地装饰着粉红樱花图案 to describe a floral pattern on the black walls of a bar?

(Asked by: username_0 on 2020-02-16)

I'm trying to describe the walls in a bar (in my story), and this is what I've come up with:

> 酒吧漆黑的墙面稀疏地装饰着粉红樱花图案。

Essentially, there's a bar and it's walls are painted black, except for a pink cherry-blossom motif which occurs infrequently.

Describing things in detail seems to be a major obstacle for me at the moment. I'd prefer to keep [漆黑](http://youdao.com/w/%E6%BC%86%E9%BB%91) and [装饰](http://youdao.com/w/%E8%A3%85%E9%A5%B0) in the sentence which are words I should learn, the others are not so important.

**Question**: How can I improve this sentence?

I'm particularly uncomfortable with 装饰着 as it sounds "active".

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In case it's of any help:

> The bar's painted-black walls are sparsely decorated with a pink cherry-blossom motif.  
> 酒吧的粉刷成黑色的墙壁稀疏地装饰着粉红色的樱桃花图案。  
> [Google Translate](https://translate.google.cn/#view=home&op=translate&sl=en&tl=zh-CN&text=The%20bar's%20painted-black%20walls%20are%20sparsely%20decorated%20with%20a%20pink%20cherry-blossom%20motif.)

**Tags:** translation, writing-critique


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## 3 answers

### Answer by username_1 on 2020-02-16. Score: 2 | Accepted answer

> 酒吧漆黑的墙面稀疏地装饰着粉红樱花图案。

--> 酒吧漆黑的墙面[上]，稀疏地[點綴]着粉红[色的]樱花图案。 --> **粉红色的樱花图案，稀疏地點綴着酒吧漆黑的墙面。**


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### Answer by username_2 on 2020-02-16. Score: 1

Your suggestion is already pretty good now!

There are other possible ways to express the same thing:

装饰在酒吧漆黑墙面上的，是稀疏的粉红樱花图案。

粉红的樱花图案，稀疏地装饰在酒吧漆黑的墙面上。


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### Answer by username_3 on 2020-02-16. Score: 0

酒吧漆黑的墙面上稀稀拉拉地贴着几片粉色樱花图案。

(Don't go to the bar, you might get the 病毒！）


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