<p>I would like to look around China.<br>
我想到中国四处转转。</p>

<p>It would be fun to explore China.<br>
探索中国肯定会很好玩。</p>

<p>I enjoy people-watching and am looking forward to learning more about Chinese culture.<br>
我乐于观察人们做事，并且期待学到更多的中国文化。</p>

<p>I'm shy but I enjoy getting to know people and I want to make friends.<br>
我害羞，但是我乐于与不同的人接触，而且我想要交到更多的朋友。</p>

<p>I'm half Chinese.<br>
我有一半中国血统。</p>

<p>为什么你的父母不帮你写？他们当中应该有一个人会讲中文吧！ </p>

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Thank you! I used the sentences in my summary. My parents can't help me because my mom was born in America and only remembers how to speak a few phrases, or only remembers after I learn how to speak it first.
amelon
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Pedroski
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<p><em>你好！【我姓___，我叫____。】/ 【我姓名_____。】 我十六岁，和我现在在十年级学生。</em></p>
<p><strong>你好！我叫___ 今年十六岁，现在是十年级学生。</strong></p>
</blockquote>
<p>English grammar and Chinese grammar might have difference, but basic writing rules still apply to both. For example, &quot;My name is XX, I am 16 years old, I am a grade ten student&quot; may not be grammatically incorrect, but any decent writer would know to avoid repeating the subject too many times within a series of related sentences and write &quot;My name is XX, I am a 16 years old grade ten student&quot;</p>
<p>&quot;和&quot;(and) in &quot;我现在在十年级学生&quot; is not needed, and this sentence has no verb (I now at ten grade student). The correct structure is &quot; I <strong>am</strong> a ten grade student&quot; (现在<strong>是</strong>十年级学生)</p>
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<p>我的家在美国，我是_____高中的学生。</p>
</blockquote>
<p>Again, you use 我 to start two sentences in a row, but the subject in the first sentence is &quot;我的家&quot; and the subject in the second sentence is &quot;我&quot;, therefore not omitting 我 is correct.</p>
<p>If you wrote &quot;我住在美国，(我)是_____高中的学生。&quot; then the subject in the first and second sentence would both be &quot;我&quot;. In this case, you should omit the second 我 in the second sentence.</p>
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<p><em>现在我的中文不好，但是我要我的中文在进步中。</em></p>
<p><strong>现在我的中文不好，但我会让我的中文进步的。</strong></p>
</blockquote>
<p>我要 sounds like a command, better use 我会让 (I would make)</p>
<p>在进步中 (is improving) is incorrect in this context, you cannot &quot;make your Chinese <em>is improving</em>&quot; ; you can only make &quot;your Chinese <strong>to improve</strong>&quot;</p>
<p>Use final particle '的' to indicate the sentence is completed and add tone of 'keenness' in your speech</p>
<blockquote>
<p><em>我是中美混血。我有妈妈，爸爸，一个姐姐，和一个妹妹。</em></p>
<p><strong>我是中美混血。我家中有妈妈，爸爸，一个姐姐和一个妹妹。</strong></p>
</blockquote>
<p>&quot;我有妈妈，爸爸&quot; Everyone have father and mother. Your sentence didn't indicate the fact that you are living with them as one family. What you really wanted to say was :&quot;<strong>In my family there's</strong> my father and mother...&quot;</p>
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<p><em>我的家人也有一只狗叫 Sophie。我都非常爱家人。</em></p>
<p><strong>我家中还有一只狗叫 Sophie。我非常爱我的家人。</strong></p>
</blockquote>
<p>&quot;我的家人也有一只狗&quot; means &quot;having a dog, same as everyone else&quot;; I think you wanted to say &quot;还&quot; (also) meaning &quot;in addition of all the human family member, we also have a pet dog&quot;</p>
<blockquote>
<p><em>我害羞，但是我乐于与不同的人接触，而且我想要交到更多的朋友。</em></p>
<p><strong>我(有点)害羞，但是我(仍然)乐于与不同的人接触，(也)想要交到更多的朋友。</strong></p>
</blockquote>
<p>add &quot;有点&quot; (a little) before &quot;害羞&quot; So that people wouldn't think you are 'too shy'</p>
<p>add &quot;仍然&quot; to indicate despite the fact that you are shy, you <strong>still</strong> are willing to reach out to people.</p>
<p>&quot;(也)想要交到更多的朋友。&quot; is better than &quot;(而且)我想要交到更多的朋友。&quot;</p>
<blockquote>
<p><em>我(乐于)观察人们做事，并且期待学到更多的中国文化。</em></p>
<p><strong>我(喜欢)观察人们做事，也很期待学到更多的中国文化。</strong></p>
</blockquote>
<p>You already used 乐于 in the previous sentence, use 喜欢 this time so you wouldn't repeat 乐于 too soon.</p>
<p>Beside, '乐于' could  also mean &quot;willing to&quot; ; while &quot;喜欢&quot; can only mean &quot;like to&quot; . I think it is want you wanted to say.</p>
<p>In this casual format, use &quot;也很&quot; is better, because it is more colloquial than 并且,</p>
<blockquote>
<p><em>我的爱好是听音乐，画画，和看书。我很喜欢写故事和诗歌。我成立了我的学校的kpop社团。</em></p>
<p><strong>我的爱好是听音乐，画画，和看书。(也)很喜欢写故事和诗歌。我(还)(创立)了我的学校的kpop社团。</strong></p>
</blockquote>

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I could rewrite your introduction completely and make it sounds like native speaking, but that would not reflect your current ability.
Tang Ho
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Thank you for such thorough feedback! I realized that my writing was rather weak (with repeated wording and simple sentences), but I didn't know how to improve it. I'll make the changes now.
amelon
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Tang Ho
<p>I need to write a brief self-introduction to find a well-fitting host family for a trip to China, but my language ability is very limited (I'm in my second year of learning Mandarin). </p>

<p>What is a simple way to write "I would like to look around/it would be fun to explore", "I enjoy people watching and am looking forward to learning more about Chinese culture", "I'm shy but I enjoy getting to know people/but I want to make friends", and "I'm half Chinese"? </p>

<p>I tried looking it up first but didn't have much success. It seems like my own (or google translate's) word-for-word English to Chinese translation might be very awkward and there are some words I just haven't learned yet. I would appreciate any other recommendations for writing a self introduction because I know mine is very awkward.</p>

<p>你好！【我姓___，我叫____。】/ 【我姓名_____。】
我十六岁，和我现在在十年级学生。我的家在美国，我是_____高中的学生。现在我的中文不好，但是我要我的中文在进步中。
    我是中美混血。我有妈妈，爸爸，一个姐姐，和一个妹妹。我的家人也有一只狗叫
Sophie。我都非常爱家人。
    我害羞，但是我乐于与不同的人接触，而且我想要交到更多的朋友。我乐于观察人们做事，并且期待学到更多的中国文化。</p>

<p>我的爱好是听音乐，画画，和看书。我很喜欢写故事和诗歌。我成立了我的学校的kpop社团。</p>

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Show us what you have so far on your translations and then we can help.
Mou某
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I wasn't able to use more eloquent suggestions, because it would be strange to my teacher if she read my introduction and it did not accurately reflect my ability at all. I appreciate all the suggestions very much!
amelon
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I'm writing a self-introduction and need help with some translation
# I'm writing a self-introduction and need help with some translation

(Asked by: username_0 on 2018-04-07)

I need to write a brief self-introduction to find a well-fitting host family for a trip to China, but my language ability is very limited (I'm in my second year of learning Mandarin).

What is a simple way to write "I would like to look around/it would be fun to explore", "I enjoy people watching and am looking forward to learning more about Chinese culture", "I'm shy but I enjoy getting to know people/but I want to make friends", and "I'm half Chinese"?

I tried looking it up first but didn't have much success. It seems like my own (or google translate's) word-for-word English to Chinese translation might be very awkward and there are some words I just haven't learned yet. I would appreciate any other recommendations for writing a self introduction because I know mine is very awkward.

你好！【我姓\_\_\_，我叫\_\_\_\_。】/ 【我姓名\_\_\_\_\_。】
我十六岁，和我现在在十年级学生。我的家在美国，我是\_\_\_\_\_高中的学生。现在我的中文不好，但是我要我的中文在进步中。
我是中美混血。我有妈妈，爸爸，一个姐姐，和一个妹妹。我的家人也有一只狗叫
Sophie。我都非常爱家人。
我害羞，但是我乐于与不同的人接触，而且我想要交到更多的朋友。我乐于观察人们做事，并且期待学到更多的中国文化。

我的爱好是听音乐，画画，和看书。我很喜欢写故事和诗歌。我成立了我的学校的kpop社团。

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> **Comments:**
> **username_1**: Show us what you have so far on your translations and then we can help.  
> **username_0**: I wasn't able to use more eloquent suggestions, because it would be strange to my teacher if she read my introduction and it did not accurately reflect my ability at all. I appreciate all the suggestions very much!  

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## 2 answers

### Answer by username_2 on 2018-04-07. Score: 2

I would like to look around China.  
我想到中国四处转转。

It would be fun to explore China.  
探索中国肯定会很好玩。

I enjoy people-watching and am looking forward to learning more about Chinese culture.  
我乐于观察人们做事，并且期待学到更多的中国文化。

I'm shy but I enjoy getting to know people and I want to make friends.  
我害羞，但是我乐于与不同的人接触，而且我想要交到更多的朋友。

I'm half Chinese.  
我有一半中国血统。

为什么你的父母不帮你写？他们当中应该有一个人会讲中文吧！

> **Comments:**
> **username_0**: Thank you! I used the sentences in my summary. My parents can't help me because my mom was born in America and only remembers how to speak a few phrases, or only remembers after I learn how to speak it first.  

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### Answer by username_3 on 2018-04-08. Score: 1

> *你好！【我姓\_\_\_，我叫\_\_\_\_。】/ 【我姓名\_\_\_\_\_。】 我十六岁，和我现在在十年级学生。*
>
> **你好！我叫\_\_\_ 今年十六岁，现在是十年级学生。**

English grammar and Chinese grammar might have difference, but basic writing rules still apply to both. For example, "My name is XX, I am 16 years old, I am a grade ten student" may not be grammatically incorrect, but any decent writer would know to avoid repeating the subject too many times within a series of related sentences and write "My name is XX, I am a 16 years old grade ten student"

"和"(and) in "我现在在十年级学生" is not needed, and this sentence has no verb (I now at ten grade student). The correct structure is " I **am** a ten grade student" (现在**是**十年级学生)

> 我的家在美国，我是\_\_\_\_\_高中的学生。

Again, you use 我 to start two sentences in a row, but the subject in the first sentence is "我的家" and the subject in the second sentence is "我", therefore not omitting 我 is correct.

If you wrote "我住在美国，(我)是\_\_\_\_\_高中的学生。" then the subject in the first and second sentence would both be "我". In this case, you should omit the second 我 in the second sentence.

> *现在我的中文不好，但是我要我的中文在进步中。*
>
> **现在我的中文不好，但我会让我的中文进步的。**

我要 sounds like a command, better use 我会让 (I would make)

在进步中 (is improving) is incorrect in this context, you cannot "make your Chinese *is improving*" ; you can only make "your Chinese **to improve**"

Use final particle '的' to indicate the sentence is completed and add tone of 'keenness' in your speech

> *我是中美混血。我有妈妈，爸爸，一个姐姐，和一个妹妹。*
>
> **我是中美混血。我家中有妈妈，爸爸，一个姐姐和一个妹妹。**

"我有妈妈，爸爸" Everyone have father and mother. Your sentence didn't indicate the fact that you are living with them as one family. What you really wanted to say was :"**In my family there's** my father and mother..."

> *我的家人也有一只狗叫 Sophie。我都非常爱家人。*
>
> **我家中还有一只狗叫 Sophie。我非常爱我的家人。**

"我的家人也有一只狗" means "having a dog, same as everyone else"; I think you wanted to say "还" (also) meaning "in addition of all the human family member, we also have a pet dog"

> *我害羞，但是我乐于与不同的人接触，而且我想要交到更多的朋友。*
>
> **我(有点)害羞，但是我(仍然)乐于与不同的人接触，(也)想要交到更多的朋友。**

add "有点" (a little) before "害羞" So that people wouldn't think you are 'too shy'

add "仍然" to indicate despite the fact that you are shy, you **still** are willing to reach out to people.

"(也)想要交到更多的朋友。" is better than "(而且)我想要交到更多的朋友。"

> *我(乐于)观察人们做事，并且期待学到更多的中国文化。*
>
> **我(喜欢)观察人们做事，也很期待学到更多的中国文化。**

You already used 乐于 in the previous sentence, use 喜欢 this time so you wouldn't repeat 乐于 too soon.

Beside, '乐于' could also mean "willing to" ; while "喜欢" can only mean "like to" . I think it is want you wanted to say.

In this casual format, use "也很" is better, because it is more colloquial than 并且,

> *我的爱好是听音乐，画画，和看书。我很喜欢写故事和诗歌。我成立了我的学校的kpop社团。*
>
> **我的爱好是听音乐，画画，和看书。(也)很喜欢写故事和诗歌。我(还)(创立)了我的学校的kpop社团。**

> **Comments:**
> **username_3**: I could rewrite your introduction completely and make it sounds like native speaking, but that would not reflect your current ability.  
> **username_0**: Thank you for such thorough feedback! I realized that my writing was rather weak (with repeated wording and simple sentences), but I didn't know how to improve it. I'll make the changes now.  

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