Then the jumps. It was nice to have them, so the readers mind could fill in what probably happened. Yet, I for one would have liked a few more glimpses on the torture.
I'am curious about what happens to Sarya. Will she escape the trap her whore has planed for her? Will she break if they get her? (If she breaks you have to be careful to ditinguish that from Viviane) Or might something unexpected happen? These questions keep one attached to it.
I don't know if you can/want to answer this, for sake of the plot: Morkate. Is she a real god? Or just an Icon, with no real entity behind it? Or is she maybe a being like Yuldasha or the Kazdruk matriarch?
Thank ye. It's a busy summer, but I'll try and get some more content up.
That's a fair criticism. I had meant for the jumps to be a way to indicate passing time for Viviane. Alas it seems it doesn't come across this way to the reader. That's something I'll have to work on myself, to make sure certain things don't feel so rushed. To make the breaking as interesting as the break itself.
As for Sarya and Morkate, I'll never tell… at least, not here in the comments anyway.