Please feel free to re-nominate it once it meets the FA criteria and when all the major issues brought up in this nomination have been dealt with.
I'm nominating this subclass for the ice bucket challenge featured article. Not necessarily because I believe this page specifically needs it: a fair number of users raised the issue that currently, most featured article nominees are races. Nominating a subclass as a featured article will raise more discussions about this, and the voting process (whether successful or not) will reveal what a subclass needs to qualify as an FA.
Nearly all of my edits have been about rewording and clarifying it rather than changing it and the Anuran race has gotten an extension due after being continually improved. So I think that this subclass can stay nominated.
Discussion this feature behaves differently depending on if you already have a Labored Flight feature or a flying speed - should the bolded word be trait? Also, I get that you can fly while raging but is the information below for when they aren't raging?
I think a little something more for level 6 would help it. Bonus action to hide is good and rogues have it level 2. I don't see any harm in allowing a feather fall effect to protect the fellers too.
I think abduction should have clarity that the thing it picks up is the same size or smaller.
"and begin raging if you were not already raging. You must be raging or have at least one use of the rage feature remaining in order to use this feature. " is this correct?
Labored flight can come from both races and classes so what is appropriate to call it? And yes it is, should it be clearer.
It also prevents rage from ending early when your sneaking on someone, but you gain that at level 15 anyway with persistent rage so maybe a feature to glide silently which would protect them from falling and fit in with being an owl.
Giving a weight limit for flying would cover that and more, maybe half your carrying capacity?
It seems correct to me, is there something odd about it?
What's odd is the end where it says you must be raging (or have a rage use) but the feature says you start raging etc etc etc. I understand it now. May look at wording that better if it can be.
I have an idea how to clarify it, I'll just make the change and revert it if it's not better.
At level 3, you can use your wings to fly to a limited extent. This trait behaves differently depending on if you already have a Labored Flight feature or a Flying Speed. You must not be wearing medium or heavy armour in order to benefit from this feature.
If you have No Flight: When you are not raging, you can use an action to gain a flying speed of 30 feet until the start of your next turn. When raging, you gain a flight speed of 30ft.
If you have a Labored Flight Feature: When using your Labored Flight action, the flight speed you gain is increased by 10 feet. When raging, you gain a flight speed of 30ft if you do not already have a better flight speed.
If you have a Flying Speed: You can use an action to increases your flight speed by 10 feet (or up to 30 feet, whichever is higher) until the start of your next turn.
Hm, true that is vague. I guess it's "you don't suffer from the half movement speed penalty." Go ahead with the wording changes! —The preceding unsigned comment was added by Varkarrus (talk • contribs). Please sign your posts.
It says at character creation you "may select stealth as a skill proficiency" does that mean stealth replaces one of your skill proficiency and if it does is it a background or class one or ether, if not then remove the "may" because who wouldn't want a free skill proficiency.
And I noticed that the way I worded the Laboured flight implied that you got the 30ft flying speed when raging and then you could use the laboured flight action to increase it by another 10ft, I think I did this by changing "racial flying speed" to "flying speed". It is not what you had originally meant but I think it is a good change, your thoughts?
With Sudden Descent, it doesn't need to say "If you are undetected" at the beginning because creatures are unaffected by it if they knew you were there.
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The main one is changing where it says "undetected" to "surprise or are hidden from" because surprise and hide are in the base game and detection isn't really.