DESCRIPTION: Write an explanation about something you have learned about energy.
Self Assesment: I did good at explaining but I need to consentraite better next time.
Buddy Assesment: brilliant job. There were some parts that I didn't understand but it was still a good story. Good job. Maia B
Heat & Temperature
Do you think heat & temperature are the same thing? Well, Keep reading to find out...
Heat is a type of energy that goes crazy & warms up the atoms. For example,You see those atoms as sweat. When your face goes bright red, you know your hot. When you cold, If you jump up & down it wakes the atoms up & that's how you warm up.
Temperature is also an energy that heats up the atoms. But temperature cools down the atoms too. When someone says 'I've got a temperature.' They normally meen they are hot because we don't use our English properly. When you go to the beach & the water is freezing when you swim. you get cold because body is trying to reach the same temperature.
Heat & temperature are not the same thing. Well,People say they are but they not because you just read what heat is & you just read what temperature. There is a difference. Remember heat it something hot & temperature is something hot or cold.Energy transfers through our body & warms up or cools down the atoms. Also, When your sick the germs heat the atoms which go crazy & make you get a hot temperature.
Heat & Temperature are not the same thing because heat is hot and temperature is hot or cold.
This informing writing proves that heat & temperature are not the same thing.
state the main point in the first part of a each new paragraph
You have used clear points start each body paragraph.
include evidence (facts, experiments etc) to support my main point
You have included a great example (evidence) that the reader can relate to. This was clearly explained - great job!
explain the evidence and how it proves my main point
You have tried to explain how/why your example proves your point - this is really tricky, well done.
Practise writing a linking sentence to my next paragraph
Your ideas link in your paragraphs.A next step is linking between paragraphs.
infuse style: topic-specifc vocab, second/third person, present tense, transition words
Great style. I wonder what other transition words. from the list you could use in an explanation?