|Hallo Dia's diary ! I will be reviewing your work "VALUES THAT PRACTICED BY A MOTHER!"
Article appears to be organized with topics/sub-headers giving more details on each header.
An article that deals with the relationship between mother and child and what values can be instilled between both parties.
Good introduction on what the topic is going to be about setting up the premise of the importance of a good relationship between mother and child.
Describing each value and giving examples of how they are beneficial in day-to-day activities.
I believe the simplistic style of the article should be easily digested by the reader and understood.
Here are a few things I noticed while reading. Please remember that these are only my suggestions/opinions and it's ultimately up to you to choose what works best.
While the article is, for the most part, understandable; there were quite a few typos and grammatical errors that could be tightened up to make it even more presentable to the reader (make use of your spell check in whatever writing program you use - even the Writing.com site pin points such simple errors that can be caught and fixed)
>>VALUES THAT MUST BE PRACTICE TO YOR (YOUR) CHILDREN!
>>A mother is (a) child’s inspiration. And so a mother and child’s relation(ship) cannot be described in words but can only be felt.
(these two phrases can be combined into one sentence)
>>A mother builds his/her character through love
(while this section is understandable at first read, I'd recommend using the phrase: A mother builds the child's character through love...)
>>Give respect (to) not only your elder ones but also young ones
>>Because when you will start giving your child respect
>>A tip is here on sharing and caring is that when (you) pack your child’s lunch box for school (,) pack some (an) extra lunch and ask him/her to share with his/her class fellow (mates).
>>Love for grandparents is (a) must.
>>both parents along with their child must pass a quality time
>> time and care today only then (will) your child is going to give you the same
>>A child always learns through your actions (,) as I mentioned before (,) so I would conclude here with the point that (you) try to mend your ways first.
>> If we want our children at a higher place in both the world we have to work, we have to reshape ourselves, we have to mends our shortcomings, we have to see world through a clear and bright light a light which we are going to pass to our children!
Quite a mouthful here, so I'll simply recommend this:
If we want our children to attain a higher place in the world, we have to put in the work, reshape ourselves, and mend our shortcomings. We have to see the world as clear as possible while shining a light that we can pass onto them.
Last but not least, give a single spacing between each bullet point, so the article doesn't look too clustered.
If you want to read more into why I made some of my corrections, you can check out: "A Guide to Punctuation"
Overall, a very interesting article and one that can be beneficial with a little cleaning up. Thanks for sharing this with us and keep on writing!