The 'string' poem was actually my favourite. Short but with a deeper meaing than, you know, string, and funny in an ironic; deadly way.
I wish I could write poetry like this, mine turn out to be depressing these days. Saying that, I haven't done anything for months.

Anyway, good stuff *name* (I don't wanna call it you if you prefer Valentine on here but I like your name, lol.)

_________________Mmkay.

Thu Nov 22, 2007 6:17 pm

Valentine

Pokemon Master

Joined: Thu Jun 15, 2006 4:59 pmPosts: 2399Location: feel the mambo

Feel free to call me Kasey, joey.

_________________

gone.

Thu Nov 22, 2007 8:07 pm

Valentine

Pokemon Master

Joined: Thu Jun 15, 2006 4:59 pmPosts: 2399Location: feel the mambo

CHAPTER FIVE DIED

KOW update on my da.

for those who don't feel like going there:

Quote:

KOW. cow. coooow.

k update tiem:

<b>OMG THE ORIGINAL CHAPTER FIVE EXPLODED!!!</b>
:O???

<b>HEY HOW COME YOU HAVENT BEEN WRITING CHAPTERS</b>
i have, but i'm too damn lazy to type them up. im also debating over the order of the chapters that arent typed up.

<b>NOW THAT CHAPTER FIVE'S GONE WE DON'T HAVE ANY CHAPTERS WITH TANGI IN THEM!</b>
what about cat tangi? >:0

umm yeah I KNOW THAT and i'll stick him in a chapter or something

<b>have you had tessa7338 edit any of your chapters yet?</b>
no

<b>when can we expect another chapter to be typed up?</b>
whenever i feel like it. i might get one in today, or tomorrow (if school's canceled again), this weekend, whatever. hopefully before christmas break/christmas itself ;[

<b>WTF QUENTIN'S DEAD??</b>
yes

_________________

gone.

Tue Dec 11, 2007 2:23 pm

Valentine

Pokemon Master

Joined: Thu Jun 15, 2006 4:59 pmPosts: 2399Location: feel the mambo

this post does not matter anymore and i'm getting rid of it to protect people from spoilers

Last edited by Valentine on Sun Feb 24, 2008 4:42 pm, edited 1 time in total.

Mon Dec 24, 2007 12:02 pm

Valentine

Pokemon Master

Joined: Thu Jun 15, 2006 4:59 pmPosts: 2399Location: feel the mambo

this post does not matter anymore and i'm getting rid of it to protect people from spoilers

Last edited by Valentine on Sun Feb 24, 2008 4:42 pm, edited 1 time in total.

Mon Dec 24, 2007 12:06 pm

Valentine

Pokemon Master

Joined: Thu Jun 15, 2006 4:59 pmPosts: 2399Location: feel the mambo

this post does not matter anymore and i'm getting rid of it to protect people from spoilers

Last edited by Valentine on Sun Feb 24, 2008 4:43 pm, edited 1 time in total.

Oh dear, she should just be with someone she loves. Poor her...and Ace too as I guess he does actually love her, he's just a bit of a pr*ck?

_________________Mmkay.

Thu Dec 27, 2007 5:47 pm

Valentine

Pokemon Master

Joined: Thu Jun 15, 2006 4:59 pmPosts: 2399Location: feel the mambo

ace is a prick, yeah. he's not mean to her but he's mean to everyone else, which really makes her angry. she likes xarion and his castle, but as long as ace is there, she's going to be gone, which is why she "ran away" (quentin says she'll meet up with them when shes really fleeing from the castle). ;o

_________________

gone.

Thu Dec 27, 2007 5:49 pm

Valentine

Pokemon Master

Joined: Thu Jun 15, 2006 4:59 pmPosts: 2399Location: feel the mambo

this post does not matter anymore and i'm getting rid of it to protect people from spoilers

_________________

gone.

Last edited by Valentine on Sun Feb 24, 2008 4:44 pm, edited 1 time in total.

we're all working on a story in #psypoke. the story contains sexual themes, and after i finish the story, a mature content filter will be put up. people who dont have an account wont be able to turn the filter off, so save it to your computer if you can.

if you want to join in, go to #psypoke. i'm done editing it right now, but later we'll work on it again.

yep. i couldn't stand how crappy the chapters are and how lifeless the characters were, so i'm rewriting the whole thing. don't worry; the same characters are there, plus some others.

however, laiden is dead, maria got a name change, and maddox doesnt exist. :O

---

prologue:

I dare you to imagine this.

Think of a peaceful village, overflowing with happy people. Everyone knew everyone else. People got along. Little children went on walks with their parents and their friends towards the woods bordering the west side of town and back every morning, and every weekend was celebrated, each individual street having its own party and welcoming outsiders with open arms. There wasn't a tarnished soul anywhere in sight, mothers loved their kin, fathers came home smiling, and, as cliché as it sounds, no child was left behind. Everybody had a future.

This place existed until one mother lost it.

Bella Star, professional florist and owner of a small gift shop, suffered from clinical depression after her beloved husband, who she had grown up with and cherished more than anything, left her due to social status (something very trivial, might I add). Needless to say, the poor woman couldn't get over it and eventually was overcome by fear, sadness, plus rage, and had no positive outlook on anything whatsoever. Nobody really noticed until her daughter showed up to school covered in bruises a few months later.

After Charis Kama died from a bullet in the chest, things just went downhill from there.

Deena Fury disappeared the day after Charis Kama died. According to Trei, she had brought them home to Laiden's father, explained what happened, went to her own house, and never came out. It has not been confirmed whether she is alive or not.

Marion Triste, age 10 and a good friend of mine, ran away from the village two years later. He had been diagnosed with necrophobia the week before. However, I have heard that he is alive and well to this day.

Laiden Kama died in a car accident at age 13. Trei, his cousin, adopted a fear of most moving vehicles shortly afterwards.

My friends and I's caretaker during day hours in the summer, a teenager we referred to as Quentin, committed suicide right before Marion left town. A classmate and companion of mine, Loretta Chang, found a note on her kitchen table saying he was going to be gone for a while, “to save someone who is dear”. She had been on vacation with her parents the night he died.

To top it all off, a young boy named Aaron Nowright burned down the entire town less than a year later.

As far as I know, everyone made it. That night was also a holiday; most families were out of town around that time anyway. Aaron had been trying to light a firework by himself to celebrate. He and his family would have been banished (because we all knew Aaron was a very honest person at the time and would have admitted to it), but he didn't come home that night and nobody found out who did it until the whole family was long gone.

All of my (living) friends achieved or are on the road to achieving their dreams today. Loretta (better known as Lori) Chang is going to college to become a forensic scientist - and babysitting at the same time.

Trei Kama loves to travel and gets to do just that almost every day.

Somebody I didn't mention – a quiet buddy of mine named Noel Circe – is a magician's apprentice.

Myself, I'm a freelance writer. My dream is to get a best-seller on the shelves. I've adopted a little girl nicknamed Mimo, as well as a cat somewhat named after myself, who has the ability to talk due to hanging around a colony of small fairies and watching over them.

I am Tangdom Regal, and I proudly present to you my newest piece – King of Words.

---

i know it's not spaced correctly, but it looks better on the forums. blarg.

edit: some stuff i forgot to mention:

bella star = belle starr, a famous female western outlaw. that's where her name is from.
mimo = mimic in italian. what can you infer from this? :O
necrophobia = fear of dead people. important part of the story, i suppose.
trei is pronounced the same as the name trey.
nowright = no right (as in, 'you have no right to do this').
triste = sad in french and spanish.
fury = fury, obviously.
chang = first asian last name that came to mind (...it is asian, right?).
kama = karma. important part of the story as well.
tangdom = tangi (which apparently also means sad) + bodom (after the lake bodom murders). no real relation to his positive disposition.
charis = charisma.
loretta = her whole name was originally going to be lorraine (my middle name), which is where lori came from. for some reason, i changed it.
circe = whatserface from the odyssey.

it's supposed to sound rather mediocre, because this is tangdom's point of view. although he is a writer, he's not the best. :p

edit: charis kama is not bella star's daughter, just so you know. she is an adult, but i'm not telling you what her relation to the other characters are (you can make a good guess though).

_________________

gone.

Last edited by Valentine on Thu Feb 28, 2008 4:03 pm, edited 2 times in total.

Oh goody, now I can read this again (I got lost when you deleted those five chapters).

This was good, it captured my attention, but it didn't tie in too well at then end with his introduction of the King of Words. Also, I could have used more character explanations to make it more clear and seem less random.

Who is online

Users browsing this forum: No registered users and 6 guests

You cannot post new topics in this forumYou cannot reply to topics in this forumYou cannot edit your posts in this forumYou cannot delete your posts in this forumYou cannot post attachments in this forum